elijahs Character portraits

This week room4 had to right a righting about a special person in our life that doesn't stay at your home so I did my teacher/principal because I felt she was easy to do.

We had to write specifically about skin,face,hair,voice,actions and personality. I hope you enjoy.

Her smooth tanned skin shines, when the sun hits it. The clean soft white skin stretches out where the veins hit.  Her rose red skin moves,  when she is laughing at me and josh’s arguments. The perfume small hitting us like  wind. The wrinkles on her feet going flat when she is walking around.

The big smile every day, as I walk through the door in the morning. The friendly look on her face smiling, when she is taking  at  assembly. The red lips being covered in crumbs at lunch when she eats. Her forehead wrinkles are sitting like a racetrack. The rose red checks going white again after a while of laughing like a little kid.

Her long dark hair waving at the bean table every day. Her black smooth hair is always tidy for us in the morning. The perfect straight hair slowly, turning gray whenever I look at her. Her never tied up hair scratching her back when she is talks to us. When I look very carefully I see some little red streaks,running through the hair like a blood flowing through the veins.

Her voice is engaging you to do all your work on time. The calming voice takes away my stress at writing. Her funny voice tells funny jokes, to are school. Her interesting voice telling us what to do at assembly. The way she slowly tells us what, to do at a year 6 outing. Her medium pitched voice talking calmly when, we do something wrong. Her fast movement speed when she needs to do something quickly. When she is listening to a boring story she put her hand on her checks. When her nose is itchy she itches the outside of her nose with her knuckle.

I remember her the most because she is my teacher. She influences others by encouraging room4 to finish to finish ther novel study, and writing . This person is special because she is my favorite teacher/principal and she works, hard for our school . The thing I treasure the most about her is that she is loyal to what she does. I think she is the best person to do because she is nearly alway near me to help me - I just need to look at her, even though sometimes she makes me use two popsicle sticks sometimes so I trade these in and can only ask for help two times!

the fog

I am learning to create an image in my mind, with a noun ( frost)  depicting the weather at this time of year in Southland.

I am then learning to write a description for this image,  using strong, appropriate and effective verbs to activate the nouns and one or two similes.

When I awake, it has appeared  like a white cloud dropping instantly to the ground

It covers our paddocks like a thick fluffy blanket,  sheep  camouflaged instantly

Bright headlights of the cars shimmer through the blanket of white, instantly warning of their presence like a lighthouse  guiding incoming boats

A once silver and black trampoline, merged with the wooden fence

Fog appearing, like a white cloud dropping instantly to the ground

prose Piece Two

Piece Two

Writing : I am learning to write a piece of prose-  a sketch with detailed words, about a particular PERSON , that is very important to me

I know I have achieved this when I can describe this sketch of this person,in specific detail. To do this I need to:

• Use specific nouns
• Activate the nouns with strong verbs

My special person has brown freckles which pop out of nowhere. Freckles covered nose sneezing a lot . forehead Wrinkles sit unevenly on his cheeks. Golden Hair smudging when he has his headphones. Red cheeks enlarging  when eating food at lunch.,Stuck Tongue liking a frozen pole at winter, Hairy Moustache growing a little bit more every day. When I stare really closely, microscopic sized freckles squeeze into little grooves. A special person, my friend.

memoir poetry

On the 31/7/17 room4 had to write a memoir poetry about a book we read and I read the book once -

In my memoir poem I needed to add adjectives, nouns and verbs to describe the scene and sitution the character was in. Here is mine. What do you think?

The orphanage was filled enough.

It had lots of homeless kids , uneventful food and dirty water.

There was a big cafeteria, it is filled with soup and lots of bed,s standing still.

There was a small riot starting there was a big kid’s head being pushed in toilet and horrednous nazis searching ….

Im horrendously Sad, scared, bored

Doing everything important , to save some souls..

100wc

Today our success criteria was to right a 100 WC about a book we read. I chose to right about the book Once. I hope you read the book after you read my 100 WC good bye.

                                                   once

All i see is flames all around me  when I jump out I get knocked out I wake up and cry for my mum and dad  I look beside me and see a boy he said”go to sleep it will be a big day tomorrow we will find your mum and dad”. I go to sleep when I wake up I say”I need to pee and I want breakfast” he let me do a pee and have some water and bread he goes to see what the noise  is a machine gun is pointed at me so scary...

100wc

this week room 4 did a 100wc an are book we read I read once it was about the Nazi   

                                           once

I was running the flames were getting clearer I look if i can see people I can’t see anyone the fire is still miles away so I don’t think I would be able to see any yet when I got near the flames I a gunshots I see  people on the ground. I know if I put a feather near the nose it will move if there alife if not dead!!! I put the feather on the man's nose it does not move then when I put it on the woman's nose it doesn't move then i see a girl.

Elijah's hollidays

This morning, we wrote 5 basic sentences about our holidays. we looked at a range of different connectives that will improve are writing. A connective is a word that joins a simple sentences, eg such as, never the less, in sprite of, but etz. Next, we spent time improveing are basic sentences by using connectives. Do you use connectives? if so , which one?

In the first week of the holidays I went to kid zone. I waited 30 minutes at a ride then they closed it never the less I still went on it.  In the last weekends of the holidays I went to see Spider Man Homecoming while having popcorn. Nearly every day my family had to go to hospital to see my papa. He just had his gallbladder removed and he's been in hospital all holidays until now.